Monday, November 06, 2006

"The Abandoned House"
It was like every other day me and my friends Brandon, Kristen, Javy and Monica were hanging out, doing what we do best. Until this one day we heard of this abandoned haunted house that a family of two died in. None of us believed that a house could be haunted so we went to go check the place out. We knew our parents wouldn't let us go on our own, so we decided to say we were sleeping at a friends house. It was Saturday around 8:00p.m when we left. "You think this place will be like everyone says? asked Brandon...Haunted? Kristen said. "Yeah". "Don't through in the towel now" i said. "Stop worrying!" Javy yelled, nothings gonna happen.

We got to the house, quite neighborhood and the house was closed off."You go in the house first" i whispered to Javy. We all walked into the house. It looked like your everyday normal house except pretty dusty and bugs. "Hellooo! Brandon screamed, no one was there. We all looked around. "I told you nothing was haunted, you guys are such baby's" Kristen said. All of a sudden we heard screaming coming from upstairs."Lets go up there Brandon whispered. None of us would go so we said we'd wait by the door.

Ahhhhh! we all ran up there to see what happened. On the glass mirror read, "Get out or die". "I'm gone i screamed, i ran to the door, but it slammed shut. My face turned as white as a ghost. Things started moving around and falling off of shelves. " I told you something was gonna happen, and now we're all gonna die. The doors and windows were sealed shut. There was no way out. Scratching started on the walls, a voice said "i told you to leave, now beware. We all screamed and tryed breaking the window. The voice came closer and closer. Monica screamed, we turned around to see that Monica was gone, and then we seen the body of the woman who lived there, she was holding a knife and had blood dripping from her. She was coming closer, and she was dragging Monica and said shes gonna do the same to us. Javy got a chair and through it at the window, it shattered, we all got out just in time before she got us. We ran as fast as we could until we got back to our town. "Monica, shes gone.. Kristen says crying. "Lets make a deal i said "Lets never go anywhere that we aren't supposed to go to again."Deal" we all said and walked away...

4 comments:

mackenzie g said...

I liked your story, but I think you need to tell what happend to Monica.

T.M said...

this story was really good. it had alot of detail and i liked it alot.

kaw said...

This is a good story. But you need to add more. For example, what happened to monica, and who was this ghost. But it really was a great story.

Anonymous said...

This story was great but I think it needs more detail.