One Scary Night
“Wake up wake up! It’s three a.m., be very quiet not to wake up the counselors, and hurry up to meet in the back room in five minutes. Bring your shoes, socks, and a dark sweatshirt!”, Mosh whispered. Lara, Marissa, Mosh, Maxine, Hilary, and Mackenzie walked out of their brown faced bunk Mosh explained that Jenn and Katie were to tired to come. All of the girls walked into the woods by the cloke of night. Crack! Crack! Crack! They heard sticks breaking. They all turned around and saw people moving in the dark night. They ran screaming not knowing who it was, but still trying hard not to wake up the counselors. They heard people screaming out to them not knowing what they were saying. They held each others hands tight with their hearts beating fast not knowing what to do. As they turned around again they realized that the faces that they were scared of were familiar. It was Jenn and Katie saying that they decided to come. As all eight girls walked together, still scared, they made it to their friends bunk. They hung out for an hour. they had cold feet to leave their friends bunk. Finally made their way into the same woods from earlier that morning.
They entered their bunk and they silently slipped into their beds and fell right asleep laughing about what happened that morning. While they were sleeping they each felt someone poke them with cold and wrinkly hands like the witches from The Wizard Of Oz. When they woke up they were to scared to open their eyes because they were unsure what had happened.
7 comments:
I think its good but needs a better ending and a scary part. Maybe you should put whos hand it was or what it really was and go on from there :]
it was ok but needed a better ending also more detail.To me it was not scary.
i think it was ok..but it didnt scare me. Also i think you should have more detail in it and a scary part.
i think it was ok but it need a scary part and you need more detail on the scary part.
The story was ok but I think it should be more scary
It was a good story but it needed an ending.Also I wasn't feeling the scary part of the story.
i think the ending should have been more detailed, like who was poking them, but overall, it was great. :]
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