Monday, November 06, 2006

People going into the airport seeing kids with all the same orange shirt on that say ors camp and seeing all the kids have a smile on their faces ready to have a good Summer. Their parents all crying because there are not going to see their kids for 4 weeks. When they are walking to get on the plain they hear parents saying goodbye. As They get on the plain they are seeing who are they going to seat with and wondering what Cabin you going to be in. They plain ride was a smooth thirty minutes. As they get off the plain to go onto the bus, and take a drive to ors camp. As they
Campers got on the bus the bus driver introduces her self on the load speaker
Saying “welcome to ors camp I am going to be your bus driver through your camp experience my name is Miss Joe. On the ride their one of the counselors were coming a round with a piece of paper and asking “what’s your name” so they can tell you what cabin you are in. B7 had Danny, Matt, Jared, Dylan and Nick. That cabin always goes on a camping trip the first week they get there is in the mountains. When the bus pulled up to the camp everyone was clapping and ready to have a great summer. Outside was all the counselors holding up a sign that was the number of your cabin and the boys consolers were Doc. So the boys all met their consoler and goes into the cabin and buts their bags down and the Ron the owner of ors camp comes in and says get ready to go camping you are leaving in the morning. Everyone was happy like a football team winning the superbowl. The boys started to pack because it was almost night time and they had to go to dinner and then sleep. The morning came and the boys woke up and went to eat breakfast and then went to get their stuff to go on the camping trip. So they got on the bus and Miss Joe greeted them when they came on. The drive to the cabin sight was 2 hours. All the boys went to sleep. When they got their they put up their tents and went into the wood to find wood just has fat as a bear. They boys brought back a lot off wood that would last them for a couple of days. They built a fire and cooked dinner. After dinner they told scary stories around the camp fire and everyone was tired so they went to bed. Then the morning came and they looked over and said O were is Danny and Matt. They looked outside to see if they were their and they weren’t their. They went to wake up doc and told him that Danny and Matt was missing. The whole day they went in the woods to see if they can find them. They had no luck. They called the camp and told Ron to tell Miss Joe to come back in the morning and take these boys back to the camp. All the boys were so freaked out that they couldn’t sleep but they all finally got to sleep. In the morning they looked over and saw Danny and Matt but they were missing Dylan and Jared. Danny and Matt was so freaked out because they dint have a clue what had happened. Doc went to look for Jared and Dylan while the boys went on the bus to a different camp sight with Miss Joe. Doc was staying at the first camp sight because they thought those boys would have come back like last night. But they didn’t so Doc called and told Miss Joe to tell the boys to pack because we are going to pick up your counselor and go back to camp because they haven’t found the boys and they dint want any one else missing. Their plan was to take the boys back to camp and Ron and Doc would go back in the morning and go look for the kids. So the boys packed up and they went to pick up doc and they head back to camp. When they got their it was really late at night. When they went to the cabin and turned on the light they saw Dylan and Jared hanging from the ceiling and on the wall was I am coming back for you, in blood. They never found who did this and all the campers wonted to go home because they were so freaked out.

6 comments:

Anonymous said...

I think your story is good but it needs more detail in it. Also I think you should not put so many paragaphs in the begining.

Anonymous said...

I think it was a good story. Also i you need alot more detail. I also ddont think it was scary. But i like the similies and metaphors.

Anonymous said...

i think the story was good but it needs more detail. and more action happening.

Anonymous said...

I liked that your story ended in suspense and that it had alot of detail.

Anonymous said...

Its good but it needs more detail.

Anonymous said...

it is weird diffrent but werid